I spent time looking for a car wash and a tyre service and ended up missing my evening walk
Today, after lunch, I decided to drive and wash my car and fix the tires. When I went outside, I noticed that my car was completely covered with snow, and the back right tire was flat. Honestly, this didn’t surprise me. My car had been parked outside, and a thick layer of snow had accumulated on it. As for the tire, I had already noticed this issue before and even mentioned it here earlier.
It took me about fifteen minutes to clean the snow off the car and inflate the tire. After that, I started searching around the city. First, I checked the place where I had changed my tires from summer to winter. The people there are familiar to me, but unfortunately, the place was closed. Then I drove around and checked several car washes and tire services. Unfortunately, all of them were closed as well. As a result, I couldn’t complete either of my tasks today. Tomorrow, I plan to try again before lunch. Hopefully, I’ll be able to get everything done.
In the evening, I missed my walk because my cousin came to visit, and I spent time at home with him. However, it wasn’t a bad thing at all. We talked for about two hours, and the conversation was very interesting. I didn’t even notice how quickly the time passed. I don’t clearly remember the last time I visited him — maybe it was in the first week of December or even later — so I had plenty of news to share.
My cousin paid a lot of attention to my gifts and the magazine from my work. He examined them carefully, slowly turning the pages and making comments. We also talked about my implants, my English learning process, my electric toothbrush, our trip to Cappadocia in 2023, and, of course, our plans for future trips. We even compared our parkas because he had bought a new one as well. Overall, from our conversation, I knew some interesting and useful news.
Today, after lunch, I decided to drive to wash my car and fix the car tires. When I went outside, I noticed how my car was covered with snow. And back right tire was flatted. Honestly, it didn't surprise me. My car stayed under the open sky and a thick layer of snow covered it. About the tire, I also was noticed, I wrote it here. To clear my car from the snow and inflate a tire, I spent around fifteen minutes. After I started my searches around my city. First I checked place where I changed my tires from summer to winter. They're working, familiar to me people. Unfortunately, it was closed. Then I just drove and checked car washes and tire services. Unfortunately, all of them were closed. I checked some tire services and some car washes. Overall, I couldn't complete both my tasks. Tomorrow I want to try it again until lunch. Maybe I can get them and complete my tasks.
In the evening, I missed my walk. Because my cousin arrived and I spent time at home. However, it was not so bad. We spent around two hours speaking, and the time was pretty interesting. I even didn't notice how the time flew so quickly. I also don't remember, what time I visited them. Maybe it was the first week of December or later. So I had some news, and I was ready to share all of them.
My cousin gave more attention to my presents and magazine from my work. He especially carefully watched them. He slowly turned the pages and spoke the comments. We also talked about my implants, English learning process, about my electric tooth brush, about our trips to Cappadocia in 2023, and, of course, plans for next trips. Even we compared our parks. Because he bought new parka too. Overall, from our conversation, I knew some interesting and useful news for me.
What you did well:
- The story is logical and chronological.
- Vocabulary is good and practical (car wash, tire service, snow, cousin).
- You express thoughts and emotions naturally.
- Long texts like this are hard, and you handled it well.
Main problems (important):
- Verb forms & articles (the / a / my)
- Word choice (some phrases sound translated)
- Sentence structure (too many sentences start with And / About / Because)
- Prepositions (on, in, at, from)
2. Specific corrections & explanations
- “back right tire was flatted” → “the back right tire was flat” (flatted → flat (adjective))
- “About the tire, I also was noticed” → “As for the tire, I had already noticed it”
-- was noticed (wrong voice)
-- Use active voice
- “After I started my searches around my city” → “After that, I started searching around the city”
-- searches → searching
-- my city → the city (more natural)
- “First I checked place” → “First, I checked the place” (Missing the)
- “Even I didn’t notice” → “I didn’t even notice” (Word order issue)
- “spoke the comments” → “made comments” (Correct collocation: make comments)
- “electric tooth brush” → “electric toothbrush” (One word)
- “Even we compared our parks” → “We even compared our parkas” (parka (jacket), not park)