I finally fixed my car tyre and drove my car toward the city border
Today was another sunny day in my city. From sunrise throughout the entire day, the sun was shining in the sky. As usual over the past few days, the sky was deep blue and completely clear. I’ve already noticed during the last few days how bright and clean the sky has been. Overall, it was a perfect, interesting, and productive day for me. Even though the temperature wasn’t warm, it also wasn’t really cold — around −12 to −14 degrees Celsius. In my opinion, this is actually very good weather for spending time outside.
I’ve already mentioned my broken car tyre many times in my previous posts, so I won’t repeat the whole story here. In short, nothing particularly interesting happened. The problem turned out to be very simple: the valve core was faulty. I just needed to remove the old valve core, install a new one, and inflate the tyre. At the tyre service, they changed it quickly, and everything was fine. It cost me 200 rubles, which is about $2.57 in total.
After visiting the tyre service, I went to drive my car on the highway. It was important for me to reach a higher speed for several reasons. First, my car had been sitting unused for an entire week. Second, the battery is already quite old — about six years — so I wanted to charge it a bit while driving. And third, I simply enjoy driving. It’s relaxing and satisfying for me.
Overall, the drive was very enjoyable. The weather conditions were comfortable, and the roads were clean, dry, and free of snow or ice. All of this made the drive safe and pleasant. During the trip, I reached the city border twice, driving the same route back and forth — about five or six kilometers one way. In total, I drove around twenty kilometers. I also tried to drive at higher speeds and keep the engine revs up, because higher RPM helps the alternator generate more energy and charge the battery more effectively.
Today I had another sunny day in my city. Since the sunrise and during the whole day, the sun shone in the sky. And the sky, as usual, was deeply blue, like the last days. Yeah, last few days I already noticed how the sky was blue and clear. Overall, it was just a perfect, interesting, and useful day for me. Still, the weather temperature was not cold, it was -12 - -14 degrees celsius. I think it's a very good temperature to spend the day outside.
First, about my broken car tyre I already mentioned it many times in my previous posts. If you want to know how it happened, you can read here or here. Honestly, nothing interesting happened there. So here I just want to describe what happened with my tyre. Generally, everything was simple and easy. Even I could fix it without any problems. Shortly, the main problem was with the valve core. I should remove the old valve core, set a new one, and inflate the tyre. Because in tyre service they just changed it and everything was ready. It cost for me 200 rubles, or $2.57 total.
After the tyre service I went to drove my car on the highway. There I could reach high speed, and it was important for me. Because I had some reasons for it. First, my car during the whole week satyed, I didn't drive. Second, my car's battery is already old, approximately six years. So I wanted to charge my battery a little bit during my drive. Third, I just wanted driving. It's so enjoyable for me and I like it.
Overall, my drive was enjoyable. For it I had very comfortable weather conditions. The roads were clean, dry and without snow or ice. All of it conditions provided me comfortable and safe driving. During my drive, I reached my city border twice, I repeated my way two times, five or six kilometers one way. Generally, I drove twenty kilometers total. I also tried to drive my car as much as possible faster and tried keeping my tachometer on high speed. Because when I kept high speed, my car made more energy. And it charged my car batteries effectively.
What you did well:
- You describe events in a logical order.
- Your vocabulary is varied (weather, driving, car parts).
- The text feels natural and personal, not artificial.
- You’re already writing at an upper-intermediate level.
Main things to improve:
- Prepositions (toward, to, in, on)
- Articles (a, the) — sometimes missing or unnecessary
- Verb forms (to drove, satyed, made more energy)
- Some sentences are too long or repetitive
- A few phrases sound translated, not natural English
- Nothing is “bad” — these are normal mistakes for a non-native speaker.
2. Key mistakes & corrections (important)
I’ll only focus on important patterns, not every small typo
- drove my car toward to my city border
Correct:
- drove my car toward the city border
- drove my car to the city border
Never use “toward to” together
- Since the sunrise
Correct:
- Since sunrise
- From sunrise
No article needed here
- like the last days
Correct:
- like the previous days
- like the last few days
- Still, the weather temperature was not cold
More natural:
- The temperature wasn’t cold,
- It still wasn’t very cold,
“weather temperature” sounds unnatural.
- Even I could fix it
Correct:
- I could even fix it
Word order matters.
- After the tyre service I went to drove my car
Correct:
- After the tyre service, I went to drive my car
go + to + base verb
- my car made more energy
Correct:
- my car generated more energy
- the battery charged more efficiently
Cars don’t “make energy” in natural English