My detailed evening routine. I walked around my area and picked up my orders
Today the weather was quite cold. The outside temperature was around –13 degrees, but it felt like –19. I felt this clearly during my evening walk. While I was walking, my face was extremely frozen, even though there was no wind outside. The hood of my jacket, especially near my throat, was covered with white frost. By the way, I walked for about one hour and covered approximately three kilometers.
During my walk, I visited several places. First, I walked along the embankment, and then I went to Sabantuy Park. On the embankment, everything was usual: I saw only a few cars parked in the parking area and one child with his father swinging on a swing. In Sabantuy Park, I saw many skiers. They were actively skiing between the trees, and I couldn’t even take a picture because they were very fast and skilled.
I didn’t wait for them to come back to take a photo because I had other tasks, and the weather was not comfortable enough. So I decided to return to the embankment and then go to the city center. While I was walking toward the embankment, I saw two girls. Apparently, they were out for a walk and were walking in the opposite direction. When I reached the embankment, I walked around it quickly and then left the area.
In the city center, some event was taking place. I heard loud music playing near the main New Year tree, and some people were rushing there. However, I decided to skip the event and go to pick up my orders. I had ordered a new English book, “Alice in Wonderland,” and a can of compressed air. Everything about the book is already clear. I ordered the compressed air to clean my laptop, and tomorrow I plan to disassemble it and clean it properly.
An unpleasant thing happened with the compressed air, but it didn’t really matter to me. I was already prepared for it because some people had mentioned similar issues in the reviews. The bottom of the can was slightly damaged, and the plastic nozzle for spraying the air was broken. However, I decided to keep it because I can still use it, and the price was low (250 rubles, or about $3). I just left a review with photos describing the problems.
Today the weather was pretty cold. The outside temperature has been kept at -13 degrees and feels like -19. I felt it by myself during my evening walk. While I walked, my face extremely frozen, even though outside there wasn't the wind. My jacket's hood area near the throat was covered by white frost. By the way I kept my walking around hour and walked approximately three kilometers. During the my walk, I visited some places. First place, it's along the embankment, and then I visited park "Sabantuy". In embankment everything was usual, I saw only few cars parked in the parking and one kid with his father swinging on a swing. In "Sabantuy" park I saw multiple skiers. They actively skied around the trees, even I couldn't take a picture. Because they were very fast and successful.
I couldn't wait for them, while they came back, to take a picture. Because I had another tasks and the weather was not comfortable enough. So I decided to come back to along the embankment and then go to city center. But, while I walked toward to embankment I saw two girls. Apparently, they went for a walk and walked opposite way from me. When I reached along the embankment, I quickly went around and left the embankment area.
In the city center, was carried out. I heard loudly played music near the main New Year tree. And some people quickly rashed there. But I decided to skip that event and went to get my orders. I ordered new english book "Alice in Wonderland" and "Balloon of compressed air". About book already everything understood. But I ordered compressed air for cleaning my laptop. And tomorrow I want to assemble my laptop and clean it properly.
With my compressed air happened an unpleasant thing. But it was not matter for me and I was already ready for it. Because some people left the comments and mentioned issues. The bottom of my balloon was smashed a bit, and the special plastic for blowing the air also was broken. However, I decided to keep it for myself because I can use it and the price was not expensive (250 rubles, or $3). I just left the review with photos about the problems.
What you do well:
- Good structure: weather → walk → places → orders → problem with order
- Rich details (temperature, distance, places, price)
- Clear meaning almost everywhere
Main problems (important):
- Article usage (a / the / no article)
- Prepositions (around, along, toward, in, to)
- Word choice (some phrases sound translated)
- Verb forms & word order
- Overusing “while” and “because”
These are advanced-level problems, not beginner ones.
2. Typical mistakes with examples (and fixes)
- “My face extremely frozen” → “My face was extremely frozen” (or better: “My face froze badly” / “My face was freezing”)
- This sounds unnatural: “The outside temperature has been kept at -13 degrees” (or better: “The outside temperature was around −13°C”; “It felt like −19°C”)
- “During the my walk” → “During my walk”
- “First place, it's along the embankment” → “The first place was the embankment”
- “In embankment everything was usual” → “On the embankment, everything was usual” (or better: “Nothing unusual was happening on the embankment”)
- “even I couldn't take a picture” → “so I couldn’t even take a picture”
- “I had another tasks” → “I had other tasks”
- Sentence is incomplete: “In the city center, was carried out.” → “Some event was being held in the city center.”
- “rashed” → “rushed”
- Understandable, but unnatural: “Balloon of compressed air” → “a can of compressed air”