Observations about my walk and finishing Alice in Wonderland
Today was the weekend, so I decided to spend the first part of the day at home. After lunch, I went for a walk that lasted about thirty minutes. It was a bit short because the weather was not very comfortable. The temperature was around -18 degrees Celsius, and the wind was strong and extremely cold. Honestly, I had checked the weather forecast beforehand, so I knew about the temperature. However, after about ten minutes of walking, I started to feel the cold on my face. My face wasn’t covered, and the wind was blowing directly into it. Because of that, I decided to end my walk early and come back home.
I arrived home at around 2:30 PM, and inside everything was warm and comfortable. But when I looked in the mirror, my face was extremely red. I also felt a burning sensation on my cheeks and started worrying about frostbite. Fortunately, after a few minutes, I warmed up, and my worries slowly disappeared. Later, my relatives asked me why I came back so early, because usually I walk for an hour or more. I explained the situation and told them about the weather conditions.
Besides that, I finally finished my book, Alice in Wonderland. I’ve written about this book many times before — how I bought it and how I promised myself to finish it in January. Now I need to start looking for a new book for February. At the moment, I’m not sure which one to choose. I’ve found a programming book about PHP and also a set of eight Harry Potter books. Over the next few days, I need to decide which one I want to order.
Today I had a weekend, so I decided to spend the first part of day at home. But after lunch, I went for a walk about thirty minutes. Yeah, it was a bit short, because the weather conditions were not comfortable enough. The temperature was around -18 celsius, the wind also was very cold, and it was strong enough. Honestly, I checked the weather predictions, and I was notified about the temperature. However, when I started my walk, after ten minutes, I started feeling the cold around my face. It happened because my face wasn't covered, and the wind swept my face properly. Therefore, I decided to finish my walk and come back to home.
I arrived at 2:30 PM and at the home, everything was warm and comfortable. But my face was as red as possible when I watched to mirror. In addition, I felt burning thoughts around my cheeks, and I started thinking about frostbite. Fortunately, after a few minutes I warmed up, and all of my worries about my cheeks slowly disappeared. Also, my relatives asked me, Why did you come so early? Usually you walked an hour or more. Then I explained my situation and told them about the weather conditions.
Still, I finished my book, "Alice in Wonderland." About it I also wrote many times how I bought it and about my promise. That I need to finish it during January. Now I need to start searching for another one for February. While I've no idea which one I need to buy. But I found one book about programming on the PHP and pack of eight books about Harry Potter. Therefore, the next days I need to decide which book I want to order.
- Very good structure: walk → cold → home → book → plans.
- Vocabulary is quite rich.
- Main issues: articles (a / the), prepositions, some unnatural phrases, and word order.
- A few phrases sound translated, not natural English — but that’s totally normal.
2. Specific corrections & tips
"I had a weekend"
Natural:
- “Today was the weekend”
- “Today I had a day off”
“Have a weekend” is not used in English.
"spend the first part of day"
Correct:
-“the first part of the day”
You’re missing the.
"weather conditions were not comfortable enough" (Understandable, but unnatural)
Better:
- “the weather was not very comfortable”
- “the weather conditions were unpleasant”
"-18 celsius"
In English:
- “-18 degrees Celsius”
- “-18 degrees” in casual speech
"the wind swept my face properly" (This sounds funny “properly” doesn’t fit here.)
Better:
- “the wind hit my face hard”
- “the wind was blowing directly into my face”
"come back to home" (Never say “to home”)
Correct:
- “come back home”
“when I watched to mirror” (Verb + preposition problem)
Correct:
- “when I looked in the mirror”
"burning thoughts" (You meant sensation, not thoughts)
Correct:
- “a burning sensation”
"About it I also wrote many times" (Word order is unnatural)
Better:
- “I’ve also written about it many times”
“While I've no idea…” (Grammatically possible, but sounds heavy)
Better:
- “Right now, I have no idea…”
- “At the moment, I don’t know…”