My first weekend was very snowy, and I spent most of the day at home. I only went for a walk in the evening
The day was quiet and enjoyable. I stayed at home and, as part of my daily routine, watched the snow fall nonstop. I even received emergency alerts on my phone about the snowfall, but it didn’t feel particularly serious. The snow was falling steadily throughout the day, and by evening the roads and sidewalks were completely covered. City services had to work nonstop, and the whole city felt slower than usual. Personally, I didn’t find it inconvenient at all. On the contrary, the atmosphere felt calm and peaceful. From my window, everything looked white and quiet, and the hill nearby was completely covered in snow, almost invisible.
Fortunately, by the evening the snowfall became lighter, and I had the chance to go for a walk. However, it wasn’t as long as usual — I walked for about twenty minutes and then returned home. I had an interesting task related to my blog, so I decided to focus on that instead.
I started rebuilding my database and developing a rating system for comments, along with other improvements. I became deeply involved in working on the database and ended up sacrificing my walk time for the blog. I think this is important for me, because I need to improve my professional skills. At my main job, it’s difficult to do that, since the technologies there are quite outdated and not very modern.
My day was pretty quiet and enjoyable. I spent all day at home, and during my daily routine I watched how the snow fell nonstop all day. Even I received emergency messages on my phone, about this snowfall. But it wasn't so awful or an emergency. Just, during the day, the snow slowly fell nonstop. In fact, the roads, sidewalks were covered with snow. Now, for the road maintenance, they should to work nonstop too. Because the city felt a bit slower than usual. Honestly, it didn't bring me some inconvenient thoughts. On the contrary, it was a very enjoyable and calm atmosphere. From my window everything looked so white and peaceful. Especially that hill was covered with snow and practically invisible.
Fortunately, closer to the evening, the snowfall became a little bit lighter, and I had some chances to go for a walk. But my walk wasn't so long, as usual. I spent around twenty minutes and came back. Because I have a very interesting task about my blog. So I've been rebuilding my database and developing a ratings system for comments and other improvements. Especially the database involved me so deeply, and I was forced to sacrifice my walk time for the blog. I think it's important for me, because I need to improve my professional skills too. I can't improve it during my main work process, because at my work everything is old and not modern enough.
- Good structure and logical flow
- Nice descriptive language (snow, atmosphere, calm mood)
- You can express abstract thoughts (feelings, priorities, work vs. self-development)
- No problem understanding your meaning — that’s huge
Main problems to work on:
- Overuse or misuse of “so / very / pretty”
- Some unnatural verb + preposition combinations
- Extra words that English doesn’t need
- A few verb tense issues
- “Translate-thinking” instead of “English-thinking” in some sentences
- “Only in the evening did I go for a walk” → Grammatically correct, but too formal for a diary-style text.
Better:
- I only went for a walk in the evening.
“during my daily routine I watched how the snow fell nonstop all day”
Problems:
- “how” is unnecessary
- repetition of “all day / nonstop”
Better:
- During my daily routine, I watched the snow fall nonstop.
“Even I received emergency messages on my phone” → This sounds unnatural. In English we don’t start like this.
Better:
- I even received emergency alerts on my phone.
“But it wasn't so awful or an emergency.” → “so awful” is weak and vague
Better:
- But it didn’t feel that serious or dangerous.
“the roads, sidewalks were covered with snow” → Missing conjunction.
Better:
- The roads and sidewalks were covered with snow.
“they should to work nonstop too” → Grammar error: should + base verb
Correct:
- they should work nonstop too
“it didn't bring me some inconvenient thoughts” → This is very non-native.
Better ideas:
- It didn’t bother me at all.
- It didn’t cause me any discomfort.
- I didn’t find it inconvenient.
“I had some chances to go for a walk” → “some chances” sounds odd here.
Better:
- I had a chance to go for a walk.
- I finally had the opportunity to go for a walk.
“Because I have a very interesting task about my blog.” → Starting with “Because” is okay in speech, but weak in writing.
Better:
- I came back early because I had an interesting task related to my blog.
“I've been starting to rebuild my database” → Wrong tense.
Better:
- I started rebuilding my database.
- I’ve been rebuilding my database.
“the database involved me so deeply” → This sounds translated.
Better:
- The database work absorbed me completely.
- I got deeply involved in working on the database.
- “for the sake of my blog” → Correct, but a bit dramatic here.
More natural:
- to focus on my blog
“I can't improve it during my main work process” → Unnatural phrase.
Better:
- I can’t really improve these skills at my main job.
“everything is old and not modern enough” → Understandable, but clunky.
Better:
- Most of the technologies there are outdated.
- The tech stack there isn’t very modern.