My unusual and productive morning. The heating system was fixed today. I’ve continued my observations about dental health
This morning started a bit unusually. It was around 8 AM, and while I was sleeping, I heard an unusual song from my phone because it was very different from my alarm ringtone. In the morning, I never remember anyone calling me, so I was confused and thought my alarm had started using the wrong ringtone. But it was not an alarm — it was a call from my uncle. He decided to call me because nobody from my relatives answered. Therefore, my morning started earlier and was very productive. I finished all my morning routine without rushing, and I could start my workday easily without any worries because I had enough time. I need to start waking up early and make a routine that satisfies me.
At around 4 PM, the technician arrived and fixed the heating system. Now everything is working: the house is warm, and hot water is available. The technician washed the hot water system and the heating system and changed a broken component. All this work took around three hours yesterday and one hour today — four hours in total. We paid 23,300 roubles ($294.94) for all this work. The price was a bit high because nobody had serviced the system properly for the last two or three years. If the heating system had been serviced on time, everything would have been okay.
I also tried to check my teeth again using a liquid to test dental plaque. This time I checked it before brushing my teeth because I couldn’t understand how this liquid worked. First, I read the instructions twice to understand them properly and use the liquid correctly. However, I didn’t find anything new because everything was described very simply and was understandable for everyone. I applied it to my teeth, waited thirty seconds, washed it off, and saw dirty places. It was really dirty, and I saw a difference compared to before brushing. After brushing my teeth, I tried to check again, but I couldn’t clean it one hundred percent with my toothbrush. Between my teeth, I still saw colored places.
P.S. I’m learning English, and I’ve shared the original draft in the comments for those who are interested.
This morning started a bit unusual. It was around 8 AM and while I slept, I heard unusual song from my phone. Because it was very different than my alarm ringtone. And at morning time I never remember about someone called me. So I was a bit confused and thought why my alarm started use wrong ringtone. But it was not an alarm, it was call from my uncle. He decided call me, because nobody from my relatives didn't answer. Therefore my morning was a bit early and it was very producive. I finished all my morning routine without rush. And even I could start my workday easily, without any worries, because I had enough time. Well I need to start wake up early and make my routine satisfying myself.
Approximately 4 PM arrived the technician and fixed heating system. Now everything is working, house is warm and the hot water is available. The technician washed hot water system, heating system and changed that broken component. All these works took around three hours yesterday and hour today, total it was four hours. Also for all these works we paid 23300 rouble ($294.94). This price a bit higher, because last two or three years nobody serviced it properly. If the heating system was serviced on time, everything was be okay.
I also tried check my teeth again with my liquid for test dental plaque. This time I checked it before teethbrush. Because I couldn't understand how that liquid working. But first I twice read the instruction, that I could understand it properly and use it correct. However I couldn't find something new. There was described everything so simple and even it was understandable for everyone. So I applied it on my teeth, after thirty seconds washed and I saw dirty places. Yeah it was really dirty and I saw differense between before brushing. After when I brushed my teeth I tried check it again. But I couldn't clean it hundred percent clear with my toothbrush. Because betweent the teeth I still saw painted places.
What you did well:
- Very good storytelling and logic
- Clear sequence of events
- Good vocabulary range (routine, technician, serviced, productive, observations)
Main problems to improve:
1.Articles & prepositions:
Examples: go to bed, in the morning, a call, the heating system.
2.Word choice / collocations
“not enough comfortable” - not comfortable enough
“use wrong ringtone” - used the wrong ringtone
3.Grammar patterns:
- Double negatives: nobody didn’t answer
- Verb tense consistency
4.Spelling mistakes (small but frequent):
producive - productive, differense - difference
These are normal mistakes for a non-native speaker. Nothing serious